Member Review

Granted this is an ARC, but there are so many missing and incorrect words I lost count. The missing words weren't a matter of style, but a matter of no proof reading.

I hate present tense as it is hard to carry off well. This book did not carry it off well. It slipped from present tense to past tense and back again. The author kept to mostly dialogue with no tags to try to get around the fact, but still didn't manage.

The author told me every single thing Kate did and was obsessed with her changing her underpants.

In one conversation that would have taken maybe fifteen minutes total, Kate used the word Dad ten times. Who does that in real life? No one. It completely changed the tone of all those conversations. And not in a good way. It made her come off as a bit snarky and sarcastic. Maybe that was intentional and by then I just couldn't care less about her character.

I could go on and on. The plot was obvious and not very thrilling (hard to be on the edge of your seat when you keep being interrupted to watch Kate change her underpants again). I knew who was harassing her from the moment the character was introduced and why.

Surprisingly enough (considering the rest of the book), the writing at the end was tighter and had better pacing--the only thing that kept this from being a one star rating.