Going Dark

Pub Date:   |   Archive Date: 19 Dec 2019

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Going Dark by Jolene Grace

Amelia Sinclair was once on the front lines as an embedded journalist in one of the Gulf wars. Now, she works for some network covering the UN. One morning, she gets a terrible video clip showing 4 journalists being kidnapped in Syria. They went over there to bag an interview with the current Syrian President. 

She takes it to her editor who freaks and drags her off to an apartment of his in Brooklyn to try and look deeper into the clip. He then calls on a source of his, Gabriel Jetts to come in and look it over. Editor wants to get a few burner phones and heads off to a corner market about the same time Jetts arrives via an alley entrance. Loud screams tip off Amelia and Gabriel to the editor being killed on the sidewalk. When they look out the window, a sniper tries to take Amelia out. Jetts and Amelia escape using a fire escape and a wild chase ensues. A chase that jumps around between NYC, Philly, lots of DC locations (including the Oval Office), Syria, Kuwait, and Turkey.

It appears that the abduction is an ISIS attempt at swaying public opinion. But in reality, it’s really just the first step in an attempted coup within the US. The goal was to make the President look weak and open up an avenue for those who truly want the US to stay as the one true megapower to take over. 

OK, a coup is an interesting take on the political thriller genre and the premise has promise. For me, the problem in the presentation was that there seemed to be some liberties made with the proverbial space-time continuum as well as with grammar:
1.	People seemed to jump back and forth across the Atlantic as though they were using the Enterprise’s transporter. The time and location issues could have been alleviated had the author used day/time/location heading. 
2.	There are a lot of speaking parts in this drama. Would’ve helped the reader keep up with each if they were identified maybe every 2nd or 3rd chapter. Instead of just saying ‘McKaine’, it might’ve help to occasionally remind the reader that he is the Chief of Staff. Especially for the numerous minor characters.
3.	I sure hope the NetGalley copy I had was still a work in progress because there were so many issues with wording, grammar, sentence structure, and general clarity. Especially in the 2nd half of the book. So many that the errors distracted me from being fully vested in the plot. 
4.	Character development could’ve been fleshed out better with some backstory as to the why behind everyone’s motivation. 

All in all, that’s too bad because the premise is pretty good. My best suggestion to the publisher would be to keep the book in the development process and let an experienced editor work with the author to make the story more coherent and readable. 

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This is pretty good, not great. It has all the right elements. It just didn't have the polish of more experienced authors. But still better than average. More focus on action than characters, if that's your thing. I hope the author continues to write. 3.5 stars. 

I really appreciate te review copy!!
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