This book was really poorly written. It didn't seem like the author read over it once they finished the first draft, and the plot was incoherent. I really like the premise of the story, and I feel like it had a lot of potential, but overall it was so riddled with typos, incomplete sentences, and contradictions that I couldn't focus on anything else. I like the concept, but I think this needs a lot more editing before it can be more than a one star read for me.

Review for 'PUMP: A short story' by Levi Heaton lll

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This is the first book that I have read by this author. I would probably pick up more of his work if I happened upon any in the library.

This is a very quick and fast paced short story. The descriptions were gory and well done. Im not entirely sure what I thought of the "background" narrative, for example "but Christy wouldn't... ".

Can't say an awful lot really as the story was that short. I did at times feel that it is something any young teenager could have written but then in other parts it was quite good and developed.

I would recommend this book to fans of short stories and horrors.

58 pages

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It’s hard to pinpoint what went wrong with PUMP. It had all the right elements and ideas to make a petrifying horror short, but after the first couple of pages, I knew that there was nothing. Keep trying, Levi!

Thanks to NetGalley for this e-arc in exchange for my honest review.

This story in the beginning had promise. I get that the reader isn't suppose to like the main character but she was awful. This read as a short story you would see from a high school student who's trying to be edgy but really it's in poor taste. It was all confusing and I felt like the longest short story I've ever read.

Maybe it's just not for me but only a couple pages into it, I wanted to DNF.

Utterly juvenile, read like a teenager's homework assignment.

The writing is clunky and disjointed, the characters don't even exist (surely there could have been a more nuanced way of writing the "spoiled princess" main character, instead of pages and pages of her explicitly demanding male attention and outright saying that she has daddy issues? Has the author ever met a human woman? This screamed "Male attention and entitlement, that's what girls are all about, amirite bros? *wink*"), and the ending is so abrupt I had to check there were no more pages left.

Honestly, nothing could set the tone better than the detailed description of the song "Thunderstruck" during the opening of the story that went on forever, lyrics, backup singers, and all, even before we're introduced to the main character (y'know, the person this was all about).

This was a cool idea, but the execution was atrocious.

A pretty standard little horror tale. Vagueness at first then it puts the pedal to the metal. Worth a read and the author has talent.

Christy is your classic bombshell who could spin any man, but what she encounters at a a gas station becomes her worst nightmare. I felt like this story had potential, but I found myself rereading sections in order to understand what was happening.

Christy is used to everything going her way and to getting everything she wants. She's young, beautiful and used to being spoiled by anyone who happens to be of the human male species. Daddy taught her to expect that. Tonight is no different and she expects no less from the guy at the counter of the gas station staring blankly at her chest. Suffice it to say, things don't go her way on this night..

No slow burn here....PUMP is a drag race. Christy goes from a spoiled little princess whosadly ignores her intuition, to a young woman that just wants to live. Chris, the hapless station attendant, undergoes changes of his own. These aren't exactly the only characters, but I don't want to give away any surprises either.

The writing is excellent. The description of the thoughts going to Christy's head and she tries to process what she's seeing and experiencing provide excellent visuals. I would recommend this to someone who wants a fast paced quick read. #netgalley #PUMP:AShortStory

PUMP! PUMP!
Our protagonist, Christy, stops at a gas station to get a fill up. When she goes inside to pay for the gas, the
clerk does not respond. Obviously, something is not right. At one point, Christy questions herself as to why she
doesn't get in her car and drive to the next gas station up the road.
Christy is described as a self-focused young woman; someone not used to being ignored, especially by the opposite sex. The clerk does not respond, so Christy must verbally bash him for ignoring her. Makes sense...NOT.
Next thing you know, a word spoken "Pump". Nothing more. Christy has had enough and goes back to her car to leave. Doesn't happen. The fun begins.
Zombie....maybe. Alien....definitely (I believe). No one else in the vicinity. A physical beating that only the Hulk could endure....and Christy becomes.....Psych! Gotta read the story!

I found some information unnecessary. I found myself confused at times, and having to reread some portions.
And where the hell was everybody. Apparently everyone within short distance of said gas station was deaf cuz there were some very loud bangs and booms.....I still enjoyed this short story. The melting zombie - bonus.

Thank you to NetGalley, the publisher, and Levi Heaton III for a copy of this ARC in return for an honest review.

PUMP: A Short Story is about a girl named Christy who stops for gas. What happens in the rest of the 50-ish pages is the bulk of the story, but it is considered a horror

What I did like about the story was that it was short. I read this on my kindle and was able to read it in about 25 minutes or so, which I very much appreciated.

What I didn't care for in PUMP was the writing and the writing style. The writing was very disjointed and choppy. Even in the first few pages there was no clear flow to what was happening. The author talks about the girl's inability to accept that not everybody wants her or wants to talk to her; she is supposedly a vain character and very self-absorbed, but there was no flow to her character development. The story went back and forth and was just overall very hard to read. The writing style also felt very unsophisticated; metaphors were used in odd places and overly explained and at times the incorrect tense of a word was used.

I also didn't care for the language used in the earlier part of the story. I do realize that this was a character and those were her words, but they struck me as odd and didn't feel like they had a place in this story.

Overall I think the basic concept of this story had potential, but was shadowed by the unpleasant writing style and poor flow of the story.

It was an exhausting, though short, read. I mean, it was all over the place.
There's a lot of point by point explanation or narration that didn't need to be there.